梅山第一中学初二（2）班 陈思远

  Books possess an essence of immortality.

  When I was a thirteen-year-old girl, I read the book called “Three Days To See”. After reading this famous one，I have been deeply moved by Helen's spirit. As we healthy persons，we can't imagine the world of the disabled who are blind，deaf or dumb. While in this book, I have the strong feeling that Helen is a tough-minded，clever and kind woman. She didn't give up her dream until she realized it. I think the story also tells us that people should be strong and never be weak when we meet something that seems difficult to face .Even we lose everything, don't lose our confidence and hope.

  In spite that Helen was poor and unfortunate， she rarely complained. She understood the real meaning of life .So it is the honor to be able to feel the sunlight. No wasting any second in our life-I think we shouldn’t do anything valueless and should cherish everything we own this moment.

  I have learned a lot from Helen and this book. No matter how struggle the life is，we ought to be optimistic and believe that tomorrow will be better.

  点评：小作者通过阅读《假如给我三天光明》，感受到海伦作为一名残疾人面对生活的坚强与乐观，体会到海伦心中的爱与感激，并号召大家应该珍惜生命的每一秒。作者采取了基本的写作四段式，高级词汇间的词性转换运用准确，时态运用恰当，语句通顺，体现了小作者扎实的语言功底。但就文章中关于sunlight一词的用法，我建议小作者可以换成sunshine，因为sunlight仅指太阳的实际光线，而文中欲表达的“阳光”还具有隐含意，所以换成sunshine更为妥当。建议作者平时阅读原著的时候，多加注意单词的用法。期待小作者更加优秀的作文。

  点评老师：蔡抒瑾 南京新东方优能中学英语教师，中学英语教研组长，主授初高中英语。