南师附中江宁分校初一（17）班 胡小小

  My hometown Nanjing is a very modern city.

  Nanjing is a good place to travel. There is less air pollution here than in other cities. There are many trees and flowers on the both sides of the roads. You can see trees, flowers and green hills everywhere.

  Nanjing is a good place to shop, too. There are many shops in the centre of Nanjing. You can buy anything you like here. In most of the shopping malls, the goods are cheap and nice.

  Nanjing is also a good place to eat. The food in Nanjing is delicious, such as Salty Ducks. You can see many restaurants in Nanjing.

  The 2014 Youth Olympic Games will be held in Nanjing. Nanjing will become a popular city to go. We are getting ready for the visitors from all over the world.

  点评：南京即将于2014年举办第二届青奥会，本文作者胡小小同学深知届时会有来自世界各地的友人参观访问南京，因而撰写了一篇介绍南京的短文。本文从旅游、购物和饮食三方面介绍南京，语言简明易懂，文章“总—分—总”结构清晰，富有条理，表达准确。三个关于南京的排比句整齐而不划一，但第二个排比句应改为“Nanjing is a good place to go shopping”, 同时“get ready for”意为“为某事做好准备”，因此可改为“We are getting ready to welcome the visitors from all over the world”，不过瑕不掩瑜，这篇文章的结构仍然值得大家学习。

  点评老师：蔡晴